house of worms
FINALLY, a new , fresh way to express what we all feel from time to time.
plus, good structure and,good rhyme. I would love to hear this one.
Tim
close your eyes
Bernd
I think the timing flows rather well in the style of--say--"I Am The Walrus", ala The Beathes, with a bit of "Strawberry Fields" mixed about. Brilliant and inspirational.
JD
monkey stew
Great lyrics Bernd, good story, I can picture telling this type traveling friend, "It sure looks like you, eating monkey stew."
Pam
Very original song. Never heard anything like it. I guess people will eat anything if they are hungry enough.
Jim Colyer
Definitely a different sound and subject. Like the Monkey Stew idea. It's amusing in an understated way...
Stevie
>/p>
terminal disease
I like this one Bernd, I like the way you play with the life for everything possible, that everything has a place, and we all have the right to live it to the fullest, or should...
I haven’t listened to it yet but will go do that now
Peace Darlene
leaving traces
Whoa, deep, very deep dude, but it makes complete sense to me, and I’m pure country, go figure. As I read lines 1 and 2, even before I read line 8, I thought Romans.
Cool job of carrying it through to the individual level, through generations, there's a lot to ponder here, Kudos, I like it.
Ron
shall I live
Hi Bernd,
Pretty dark take on the human condition. It fits the world we live in. I am interested in hearing this set to music.
it's all there
Morning Bernd:
This is one interesting lyric. The short, crisp lines add something that pulls me in and keeps me reading.
I ... really enjoyed how you brought us along from the beginning of the relationship till its end. Good Job!
Douglas
I like this, Bernd! I respond to songs that take on large themes, and it doesn't get much larger than "It's All There." ... Nice job. Be proud of it!
Bob
in need
I really like this one... it's simple and with the right music and vocal, could put one in "the mood".
Jen
your place or mine
Hi Bernd,
this is an interesting piece. I like the story behind it...a couple meeting in a bar and starting a conversation. Really nice lyrics. Good job.
Hey Bernd - interesting piece you have going on here...I’m with Robert, I enjoyed it from a thematic standpoint. Not complicated - just an easy exploration into "the every day" in a way that most will be able to relate to. Any plans on production?
long-legged divinity
Bernd,
I really enjoyed this lyric. You nailed this one labeling it a Stonesish tune. Definitely fits in with their “sleazy style” songs. I could hear this being played in a smoke-filled bar at just about closing time!
John
sense of recognition
Hi bernd! Wow, yeah nice write! The cool thing of when I first read this is I didn’t know if you were talking about family or friend-it let my imagination loose to contemplate the lyrics in a couple different ways. This is a perfect example of creating a couple sets of doors to let the reader choose to go through. I also like the fact that the last two lines have no rythming reference, ending with the word ‘recognition’ (I bet that word rolls off the tongue dramatically). I haven’t listened to it yet so...I agree with shirl about having a 70’s feel to it, I’m not sure about how people will enjoy having ‘brother’ at the beginning of each verse but I tend to do the same to keep drilling the mood forward. Now that you’ve told us the ‘brother’ reference I can clearly see how the lines fit together. Nice job!
Jay
pay them back
you keep it tight, no over indulgence with words. vivid paintings with words, shows skill.
David
Got some good imagary starting with the yellow rain. A dark, brooding song full of fear and loathing and revenge.
Dan
jumpy
Whoa Whoa...Merci ..Merci Bernd !!
Youre Full Throttle Dude :..lol..lol...
This Is One Hot Piece;0
:) :) Bernd I Luv How You Elevated My Interest
Levels. .oooooweee -
Your First Verse Just Grabbed me And
Took me on This amazing Ride ..:)
I'm diggin JUmpy.....
Excellent Write-
Shirley
Ganymede
This would be a fabulous opera piece, Bernd. You are awesome at retelling these legends from Greek mythology. Kudos to you for the precision in your craft!
JD
Hi Bernd, This is some very fine writing you have got going on here. I agree with Darlene. I love when someone creates a work of art. Nice real nice. Tony
Bernd,
This is a excellent write, I can envsion the images you are portraying in these lyric’s. I love Greek Mythology and history its always interesting its filled with, darkness, love, joy, lust and greed!
Sara
peaceful times
Wondering why more people can’t just see the truth like you do. I wish society would just simplify their minds for one day and see the world as children do. This song is what they would sing.
Jorge
Bernd
As I see it this piece is important precisely for its uneducated viewpoint, its simplicity, its inherent disdain for the illogic of war. This is an human perception laid out as a human being ought to lay bare the stupidity of war as it conflict with the many beauties love invites and nourishes as a sort of utopian vision within and between us...and between all lovers, who obviously have no place for horror. ...
I like what you have so long ago written, Bernd; ...
listen to the river (Siddhartha)
Great lyrics Bernd. So pretty. I really loved it. Thank you so much to share it with us.
Craig
Good morning, love
Hi Bernd,
Nice melody you have here. I really enjoyed your guitar break too. I wish there had been more of that, in fact.
Matt
make me real
really enjoyed reading this very up lifting, story of love coming out on top!
Great line - Since you've come to make me - real!
Sara
This has a really good flow, Bernd. I like the mood of it--sort of dreamy/sort of lucid. Very nice work.
JD
giants fall
This is one of your greats! What a clever write I love the whole concept of the lyric “Gaints Fall” Oh they sure do! An your lyric describes exaclty what I want to say to a few people!!! So get some music to it so I can call them and play this down the phone!
Sara
Hi Bernd,
nice write. I think some lines still need just a little polishing but all in all this looks like a very strong song. I especially like the way you wrote the pre-chorus lines. Good work!
Robert
This is a great song!!!
I love the title and chorus most.
I bow down to you sir...excellent work I say.
Shari
don't hurt me
I like that there is stuff left unsaid, it makes you think what’s this
guy hiding and why, is he trying to protect her, not break her heart,
yeah a head scratch-er, like that,
tony
Gilgamesh
Wowwww Bernd !!! This is awsome !!! Excellent imagery. I love this story. What a gift you have.
You story teller you! God Bless,
Shari
Good morning, love
That´s real sweet and honest - a tribute to a lover without being cheesy.
A perfect example of a well-structured Lyric!
Martin
Very nicely done. Flows well all the way through. And I wasn’t expecting the twist at the end.
John